Student #2:
The issue in this student’s paper is how technology, specifically that of cell phones and social networking, affect us today and whether it is a positive or negative effect. The importance is briefly explained in that the author states how this is a far reaching issue that impacts most people in America.
The four perspectives are easily identifiable and they are that of university professionals, parents of students, the students themselves, and the makers of these technologies. The thesis is very informative on show who the supporters of each perspective are; however, there is no indication of their views, although they are outlined in the paper.
I think the introduction to the paper is very well done; however, in the conclusion I feel like it could’ve ended better with more wrapping up and more in-depth discussion of the author’s opinion.
Overall, I do think the essay was effective because I myself learned a lot about different people’s views on the necessity of technology. If I had been peer reviewing this essay, I would have suggested that the author spent more time developing each perspective, especially that of the parents of young people.
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